To put it mildly, your story sucks.

Eric wasn't a psychopath.Dave Cullen is a lying famewhore with his own agendas of money and fame .
His book is utter trash.

Next time , please do some real,detailed research before slandering a dead person.

Ok?
Thanx. Bye.

OMG ! I LOVED your story ! i read it in one day lol :P anyway I just wanted to let you know this is one of the best stories I've read on this website! It actually has a plot ! I really enjoyed it and I think you should pursue your career in writting !!

As for your questions these are my answers :

-Who was your favorite character?
Well I liked Emma because she has great comebacks :p

-What was your favorite part/chapter?
I like the part where Emma explains to Paul that she used to date Steven and that she was the first to know he was gay and that they later became best friends. I also liked the part where Emma tells paul about her childhood sweetheart :)

-Is there anything you think I should improve on in my writing?
I found your writting great and I really enjoyed it !

-Do I have any particular strengths?
I have to say I very much enjoyed the witty comebacks that Emma came up with. You also managed to connect the events together in your plot very smoothly :)

Goodluck in your writting and I'm off to read some of your other work :)

CHEERS !

This story was just so sweet! You did a really awesome job with it.

Wow. I loved it. It was extremely well-written, and had a very cute storyline.

Here I was, saying i'd try a few chapters to see how it was, and what can I say. You have me hooked.

oh, my god. I swear to god i started crying when i read the cafeteria scene. It's just...so CUTE!!

AMAZING STORY.

I've really enjoyed reading this so far. The story is interesting, and I'm curious to find out what happens, when I have more time to read...

I love it. I love it I love it I love it. it's so sweet and I LOVED the lunchroom scene. it was beyond adorable. you just got added to my favorite authors list, just for the last 2 chapters of this

This is a really good story. I really enjoyed reading it.

I didn't feel like signing in as angel718...and by that you should know who this is. :) Yes, I did read the ENTIRE THING TODAY! JUST NOW! I am so glad I read this. It's adorable!! They're all such...lovely characters. I actually don't hate Johnny, believe it or not. Really, really good story, dear. Like it loads. :D:D Keep writitng!

-Who was your favorite character?

Definately Steven. He was so sweet and cute! I can't wait to read this new story on him!

-What was your favorite part/chapter?

My favorite part, (no duh) was when they made up and kissed for the first time! It was sobeautiful and sweet, well written too!

-Is there anything you think I should improve on in my writing?

Maybe, more description to your story. It adds more depth, you know?

-Do I have any particular strengths?

You are a wonderful writer. I enjoyed the plot and the way that you moved the story along instead of making it go too slow.

I hope this helps you some. I used to ask my readers to do this same thing, most of them didn't, so I stopped. I really loved this story and I can't wait to read more!

This story was really good. The one thing about it though was how cliche the end was. I mean, it brought everything into a full circle, but it felt kind of detached to me. I don't know maybe I'm weird.

Fav character? The guy who is friends with Stephen and Emma who Stephen told that he was gay.

Fav part/chap? Don't really have one.

Something to improve? Less cliche ish. One thing about this story (that I'm realizing as I'm looking back) is the fact that you made it seem kind of detached from real life. Like as if those characters were living in their own little bubble. They rarely had contact with others outside of their little group. And if they did the contact was only to get away from someone in the little group.

Yeah, basically make it more real. Don't just focus on your characters, include the world around them as well.

Strengths? keeping a person in character and separating the charaters. This could be worked on a little bit but for the most part each character had their own personality and you didn't have their words stary from their personality.


Good story

awesome story!i loved it!

I LOVED IT! Great job!