This is good writeing. but i think you should be careful about rambling on about things.

Lot of political backstabbing here. Never new much about the neocons, but I just looked them up on wikipedia. Scary the conspiracy (or at least something like it) exists.

this story has blown me away. the scope, the detail, the multi-facets, the realism, all of it leaves me completely invested in this story. it's really given me a lot to think about in regards to many different issues. and again, i can't stress how real this seems. it's stretched my imagination quite a bit, making me think about what's going on in multiple parts of the world. i hope you finish this.

Neat stuff. You're using the varying "specialists" of the network in an interesting, plot-thickening fashion; after all, this means not only that we could see what Ignatius does with Eric's virus, but also the results Ignatius turns up for the reading list. Neat stuff, and I'm eager to see more.

Neat stuff, dude. As a note, if you want me to contribute any information for the St Ignatius character, I'll be happy to do so.

I can see you put a lot of thought into this already. Good chapter. And of course, Ernst has to liken guns to girls.

Good job. *_*

This is really intelligent stuff. really interesting. its good

Hmm... intriguing. Nice to see something that's not all lasers and nukes in the sci-fi section: I'm having to think, shock horror!

I've noticed you've been playing around with different titles (unless I'm hallucinating)- hope you find one you like, although considering the current quality it won't be that much of a deciding factor ;)

This promises to be a very interesting story.

The ending, the email reply was a bit confusing where you address the mail as to Dan, then in the first line you have: "The fucking Gaians kiled him, Bob."

Good job. *_*

-Stroking the completed firearm like a lover-

DAMMIT JAVE! Why must you do that?

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Just kidding. Sort of.

This looks amazingly promising. Fancy collaborating, or have you already got something planned? I could use a project like this to get my brain back in gear, plus make headway into a new genre.