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| spaz-face 2007-04-05 ch 6, anon. | abuseYour story line seems good so far, but you grammar needs a lot of work. You might also want to consider developing your plot more and making your chapters longer and less choppy. |
| Sin Girl7 2006-12-21 ch 13,  | abuseNice ending! I'm happy for them and waiting for your next stoy ;) Kisses for you girl;) |
| Sin Girl7 2006-12-06 ch 12, | abuseI'm ansious to read the last chap of this story! Update soon! Kiss! |
| Sin Girl7 2006-11-15 ch 11, | abuseVery nice chap :) I'm ansious to read the next one and your second story and talking about second stories, i also have a new one now! Its called the forbidden passion and i would love if you read it! Please? Lol, if you don't mind ;) Update soon! Toodles! |
| Da Vinci at Work 2006-10-31 ch 6, | abuseYay! Chapters are long now! Anyways, some grammar stuff again. Edit it more carefully. Good job though. |
| Da Vinci at Work 2006-10-31 ch 3, | abuseShort chappy again. There were some grammar mistakes. (Just separate the lines for dialogue and new paragraphs. I couldn't tell who was speaking.) |
| Da Vinci at Work 2006-10-31 ch 2, | abuseWhat does J.J. stand for? Nice chapter, though it is short. It gets right to the point. |
| Da Vinci at Work 2006-10-31 ch 1, | abuseNice beginning. Wonder what happened to make her so ** at him... |
| Sin Girl7 2006-10-27 ch 10, | abuseI'm guessing lelani is gonna slapp him again or... they are going to kiss... OR... i dont know! Hope to read the next chap! And sorry for not reviewing eralier, but scool's taking over me, i only have time to study and sometimes to Write! Well, keep up the good work! |
| EeeNAce 2006-10-22 ch 10, | abusei wantlonger chappies ^^ |
| EeeNAce 2006-10-22 ch 4, | abusehahaha right after i comment on the format, I realize that the next chapter is in story format. ^^ Disregard the last review =D |
| EeeNAce 2006-10-22 ch 3, | abuseIt's quite good, I think it would be nicer if you had it in story format.. (if you do, then disregard that.) I mean... instead of centering it, you should align it to the left. But anyhow, I shall continue! ^^ |
| EeeNAce 2006-10-22 ch 1, | abuseoo... dramatic... definitely catchy. |
| jay girl 2006-10-09 ch 9, anon. | abuseReally good story so far. Please post next chapter as soon as u can. |
| SO-iiN-LOVE 2006-09-28 ch 8, | abuseH3Y MAMA ii LOV3 YOUR STORY iiTzZ HOTT |