This poem has potential, try to work it out, I would change things likce lines 4,8,12, and 16-I think that you are trying to split this poem into stanzas, whcih I like but, you can do better!

Lose and losing are spelt with one 'o'.

Loose and Loosening are different words, there is no suc word as loosing, not to my knowledge any way.

'Who am I?' Is a question I have asked myself constantly. After years of thought and reflection I have come to the conclusion that we are all illusory.

Keep writing

Alan