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| I Hate Math 2007-11-02 ch 4,  | abuseI find this story slightly confusing. It could be because I'm too lazy to scout out my contacts so that I can read easily. It seems like the scene changes too often, and it's hard to follow the flow of the story. I feel unsure of what's going on, and the way the years keep changing makes me feel left out. The story has potential, I just think it needs a little tweaks here and there to help it shine. Helen Burke Post |