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| A. J. Krautwurst 2006-09-27 ch 1, | abusethis is so simple and paints such a strong picture. i'm very stongly reminded of the book "sitting in the club car drinking rum and karma kola: a manual of etiquette for ladies crossing canada by train" by paulette jiles. she's a canadian author, you should try to find a copy. i'm sure you'll enjoy it, her style seems very similar to yours. |
| smile persephone 2006-09-09 ch 1, | abuseThe format alone is wonderful, but the words within make this poem excel past perfection. Lovely. |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2006-08-16 ch 1, | abuseSplendid formatting and diction. |
| agirlnamed-aly 2006-08-11 ch 1, | abusePerfectly executed. Boys suck. TV ruins everything. I can relate. xoxo Aly PS You're still great. |
| mezzie 2006-08-05 ch 1, | abusemmhm. mezzie |
| water lily nymph 2006-08-01 ch 1, | abusethis is about that last 'Friends' episode huh? sweet job capturing it. this is a really shortly cute story. the ending couldn't be more perfect. ~* |
| citrus scented 2006-07-28 ch 1, | abuseYou know your writing has come such a long way from when I first started reading your stuff. You are probably one of the oldest of my favourite authors that I've been visiting for...and every single piece never disappoints me, only stuns me by the seemingly impossible improvement from the last masterpierce. This is deep and thoughtfull, and the image of watching the tv and turning it off is so vivid it really enhances everything in this. I know how you feel, and this is just well put. The last lines, in themselves are tearjerkers :"(you don’t have to fly ‘round the world to find me when I’m right here) ...and always will be "beautiful, it seems to flutter off the page and leaves you stunned with the sheer yet simple emotion. I love your work . |
| mizu no kokoro 2006-07-21 ch 1, | abusewow, i can relate... how many times have i watched the tv and the romance stories and wished my life was like thatXD nicely done keep writing! |
| Crazy Biene 2006-07-18 ch 1, | abuseaw! so it's lyk the chase in romance movies? kewl thanks for the review +B+ |
| Aimee Raven 2006-07-17 ch 1, | abuseFriends? Sweet and sad, but then it's so amazing how you conjure all this up only for the two lines at the end which bring an entirely new meaning to everything. Sad. But really good work :). Love, Mia |
| the.pink.life 2006-07-16 ch 1, | abuseWow. Somehow, this is just amazing to me. I think it's the use of "babe," because that always seems like such a close and comfortable relationship, but sexy at the same time. I just really like this. I'm going to favorite this, because it won't get out of my head! Keep writing! :) |
| breezy nostrils 2006-07-14 ch 1, | abusewow sad last lines. nice work. |
| method acting 2006-07-13 ch 1, | abuseFriends! Laugh laugh laugh. I like the bit starting with >b l a c k. Really fleeting, the whole thing. It's just a section of a racing mind. I like it. |
| Ashes.to.Acid 2006-07-13 ch 1, | abuseI've never seen a format quite like this...it's cute. |