This is a truly fantastic story. Your writing is very powerful, addicting, in a way. Good job, and I can't wait for more!

~carm~

This story isn't very believable. The way they talk, and how fast everything moves. It's just not that believable. It needs to be more detailed. I think someone already said that.

This, amykins, is without a shadow of a doubt THE most well-written, intriguing chapter you've written. I don't know if I've said this before or even if I said something similar for your other chapters...

... but, rereading it as I just have, its pretty amazing. I mean, wow at your word choice, your vocabulary, your sentence structure. (Even your spelling!) You managed to use some pretty advanced english without getting to the point where it is difficult to read... (That means, you did a good job.)

I love it. M. Love the suspenseful atmosphere... can't wait to see what you do with this... (if the rewrite comes, and hopefully it will.)

*e-smiles, e-hugs, and e-kisses)

M, I like this chapter, I think its one of my favourites. Although, you have a few spelling mistakes.

Off to the next chapter!!

Dark. Really dark. You scare me, a little, but only in a good way.

Can't wait for the next chapter.

See? Dallas is CREEPY. He kinda scares me. You better hope him and Shawn never meet, because I can ASSURE you what will happen. (gr?)

I don't get the end. Is that Sophie having a flashback?

Yum. This is an extremely well written chapter. Love your description of the hospital.

Thou art morbid, my dear.

Love the intro.

Gotta say, my view of Dallas isn't improving. He doesn't seem very misunderstood. He's just creepy and evil.

Dallas is creepy. I don't like him, and I don't think he has redeeming qualities.

This chapter is my favorite.

M. Salty blood.

You ought to rewrite this and make it a bit more in-depth.

Seriously, fit the world "revulsion" into this chapter, and I'll love you forever.

This is far too short. Write more!

Wait, I could just go to the next chapter. I think I'll do that.