This was pretty good. The words flowed nicely and it certainly isn't weird, but the underlining meaning is swims around strangely. Not in a bad way, but in a minorly confusing way.

Otherwise that, it was nice.

i like this much better than The Promise. the words flowed better and everything but then ive never read manga so i dont know if thats how the writing style is meant to be. This is good,

Oh yea, it's weird. Not as weird as some stuff I've written, but still in the genre of weirdness. I think this is awesome. Very well done. I enjoyed reading it... a lot X3

I agree with you - very, very weird! But in a good way too. Merry early christmas.

Hey! i alays support your story and poems! You're really good at making it. Keep making and you might be a proffesional.

The good thing is, you are not thoughtless.

That sounds bad doesn't it? But its not. Its a compliment, you see, to me lines like 'I don't think that love can save everything/but' are special, it shows you are not just digging a well of blind emotion like 99% of the ** writers on this site but that you are actually talented enough to look into your own mind and see how it and the concept of 'you' fit into the physical world.

This is the first poem i've reviewed today, i'm glad it was a good one.

Keep writing, hope to read more of you.

Alan

Wow! This is really good! Thanks for sharing, and keep writing!

~Anna~ ^_^