amazing amazing amazing! the imagery is awesome and the subject choice is just so sweet. i loved reading this! keep writing!

Oh my good golly gosh, I think I've completely fallen for your work. The first stanza is superb, and by the time it gets to the end, my heart has contracted into a pounding mass of sheer love.

The imagery is amazing. You really know how to work your word choice.

what a wonderful poem! very romantic. i loved your imagry here. i especially loved the first stanza "on a day when 'alone' sounds like 'in love'/ and beauty contradicts itself/ because everything is/ beautful" i don't know why, but that stanza particularly stood out to me. very nicely done, darling. i miss reading your work and i'm glad i can finally be back-if only for a little. very beautiful and i'm glad you keep writing! i've missed FP dearly! keep writing forever and always!

love always and forever,
~Davida ;P

*squeals* really, really, really loved this. Adored is a better word, really. It sounds like a secret romance of sorts where the two aren't really together yet but they seem to be and the boy is wild and untamed and the girl is sweet and unsure.Amazing.

The beginning is really awesome. The detail and flor of it is amazing. Towards the end things get a little jumbled but it is still understanble! Great job i really like this!

This is excellent. I agree with the reviewer who said it was mind-boggling. But I still like it. And the reference to Aphrodite is good; it gives the poem a wider scope. Very nicely written.

Hmm.. *strokes chin while thinking* .. i'm not sure what to make of this.. though it is brilliantl written... I prefer the first half of it to the second and.. I don't really knwo what I'm saying.. hmm..

I'm blown away. Superb job. I love the "You will...in time." Mind boggling. I love it. :)

love that first line and very unexpected ending. i don't know about using past tense. i think present would be better, but whatever works :)

keep writing!

Great poem.

I love the Aphrodite imagery; it adds a lusty feeling to the piece. (More so than there already was.) This poem feel dirty, but beautifully so. I also sense a deep complexity. Lovely work.

oh wow ur a talented poet as well! this was amazing. i was blown away reading this. i loved the descriptions and u made the characters realistic, even that pesky boy. i liked the fact that it wasnt a cliche romance. "as Aphrodite tiptoedAcross the horizon" that would have to be my favorite line. highly creative and equally beautiful! kudos!

well, i rather liked it, and i know what you mean by pesky little boys with sweet smiles. they allways seem to creep into my words at the most random times. i liked the beginning stansta the best. b e a u t i f u l . have you ever heard of / or watched a movie called american beauty? if you haven't DO SO QUICK it's an amazing movie (even if it is american) and it gives you a whole new concept on beauty. but after reading this poem, i'm not sure you need one, but you can never have to many opintions. or however in the world you spell that.

This was an example of amazing and exquisite poetry. Beautiful, truly.

I loved the idea of Aphrodite tiptoeing away, after making two people see the world in each other.

~the Stranger in the moonlight~

I like it

KEEP WRITINGRosie