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Miss Dridier 2007-11-12 ch 1,	abuseOh my good golly gosh, I think I've completely fallen for your work. The first stanza is superb, and by the time it gets to the end, my heart has contracted into a pounding mass of sheer love. The imagery is amazing. You really know how to work your word choice.
blacktearsof*innocence 2007-01-01 ch 1,	abusewhat a wonderful poem! very romantic. i loved your imagry here. i especially loved the first stanza "on a day when 'alone' sounds like 'in love'/ and beauty contradicts itself/ because everything is/ beautful" i don't know why, but that stanza particularly stood out to me. very nicely done, darling. i miss reading your work and i'm glad i can finally be back-if only for a little. very beautiful and i'm glad you keep writing! i've missed FP dearly! keep writing forever and always! love always and forever, ~Davida ;P
Mari Grem 2006-10-02 ch 1,	abusesqueals really, really, really loved this. Adored is a better word, really. It sounds like a secret romance of sorts where the two aren't really together yet but they seem to be and the boy is wild and untamed and the girl is sweet and unsure.Amazing.
lordelfy 2006-09-22 ch 1,	abuseThe beginning is really awesome. The detail and flor of it is amazing. Towards the end things get a little jumbled but it is still understanble! Great job i really like this!
Alex Bowing 2006-09-17 ch 1,	abuseThis is excellent. I agree with the reviewer who said it was mind-boggling. But I still like it. And the reference to Aphrodite is good; it gives the poem a wider scope. Very nicely written.
wolfeh 2006-09-11 ch 1,	abuseHmm.. strokes chin while thinking .. i'm not sure what to make of this.. though it is brilliantl written... I prefer the first half of it to the second and.. I don't really knwo what I'm saying.. hmm..
Felicia Danielle 2006-09-01 ch 1,	abuseI'm blown away. Superb job. I love the "You will...in time." Mind boggling. I love it. :)
chaos called creation 2006-08-31 ch 1,	abuselove that first line and very unexpected ending. i don't know about using past tense. i think present would be better, but whatever works :) keep writing!
Infinite Abyss 2006-08-21 ch 1,	abuseGreat poem.
smile persephone 2006-08-21 ch 1,	abuseI love the Aphrodite imagery; it adds a lusty feeling to the piece. (More so than there already was.) This poem feel dirty, but beautifully so. I also sense a deep complexity. Lovely work.
toxic-noodle725 2006-08-15 ch 1,	abuseoh wow ur a talented poet as well! this was amazing. i was blown away reading this. i loved the descriptions and u made the characters realistic, even that pesky boy. i liked the fact that it wasnt a cliche romance. "as Aphrodite tiptoedAcross the horizon" that would have to be my favorite line. highly creative and equally beautiful! kudos!
Finger Dingbat 2006-08-04 ch 1,	abusewell, i rather liked it, and i know what you mean by pesky little boys with sweet smiles. they allways seem to creep into my words at the most random times. i liked the beginning stansta the best. b e a u t i f u l . have you ever heard of / or watched a movie called american beauty? if you haven't DO SO QUICK it's an amazing movie (even if it is american) and it gives you a whole new concept on beauty. but after reading this poem, i'm not sure you need one, but you can never have to many opintions. or however in the world you spell that.
the Stranger in the moonlig... 2006-08-03 ch 1,	abuseThis was an example of amazing and exquisite poetry. Beautiful, truly. I loved the idea of Aphrodite tiptoeing away, after making two people see the world in each other. ~the Stranger in the moonlight~
Goddess Rose 2006-07-27 ch 1,	abuseI like it KEEP WRITINGRosie
dancingintheshadows 2006-07-26 ch 1,	abuseYou are my new favorite person. For always. And if you for some reason feel the inane urge to impregnate someone, I will be happy to have your babies. And yes, I am one of those people who shouts "HAVE MY BABIES!" at awesome people. Or feels the need to lick them. But don't worry about the licking thing... I don't really do that anymore... much. Phew... Way of topic, but then again I am in quite the strange mood having just been immersed in old stories I'm clearing out. I absolutely have fallen completely head over heels in love with this poem. The imagery, the feelings it invokes; just everything about is breathtaking. The last line really tied it all together for me and made the poem all the more awesome. -sighs- I can't even express the words... I shall exuent with my imaginary friend Bob... who happens to love pickles by the way, and takes to scaring off "normal" people when I talk about him... before I ramble you to death. Cause that would be bad. ^^ ~dancingintheshadows

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