Just a marker to show where I left off. To self: Start at chapter 11! Love, August

Aw. I am intrigued, indeed

So I obviously fail at reviewing (duh; I read the whole story straight and this is the first I've responded to YOU about it), but I have to say I love it to absolute pieces!! Patrick is love, and his utter randomness had me in stitches the whole time (a difficult thing to do). I swear, for the next three days I will think of "lemonade" and spontaneously start to giggle. My roommate only knows of that instance, and has taken to saying that one word to get me to laugh. So yes, definitely a favorite. :) Wonderful job!!

“You are by far the most illogical person I know,” he says huskily. What is this? It’s like a Mills and Boon, only we’re young, not desiring to get married and both male. Not that I used to read Mills and Boon. I mean, it’s so predictable… And the men are always hairy or like, Scottish or something. Unless they’re a chauvinistic jerk of an Arab Sheik. Ok, so maybe I have read a few…
-- Such a fan of Patrick's ramblings!

Love the whole vampire element! In Heath's words, Patrick is such a spaz!

“I’ll lick YOUR spoon!” Heath grins.

“Shut up Heath.” We both growl.

--Love it!

“I married a Serbian strong-man in a moving 17 minute ceremony three weeks ago. We made passionate love in a water fountain. I was the blushing bride.” I say calmly. Warren blinks.
-- I love your dialogue!

Loved the reactions and everything in this one :)

As I draw back, Patrick is just dazed enough not to notice when I lick my lips deliberately, and give the mother the finger. Lawrence and Harvano grin, and I think we’ll get along just fine.
-- Excellent :D

Love the characterization you give these two!

Then I realise something’s on top of me, something that’s warm and breathing.
- Love your descriptions, they make me smile :)

“Ok. Nice meeting you… Patrick.” Heath sounded distinctly amused. What was that pause between the rest of the sentence and my name? Does he know I know? Does he think that I know that he knows I know? I’m too young to die!!
-- Love it!

it was reaally great, i actually laughed so hard i had tears in my eyes at some point.. patrick s right now one of my favourite fiction characters. great job!

Aha, looks really awesome so far (I've only read the first capter, as you can see...)...

Your style of writing is really cool, and humorous; plus this plot line looks really awesome!

~x~

HOW COULD U NOT LIKE MCR AND AFI XD haha they kinda rock. but hey its ur opinion not mine. good story. im only on chapter 8..is it complete yet...im not sure...will You evenread this..i dont know but i like it =]