haha. i enjoyed this.

This was a great way to introduce the main character. I usually wait for more to say this but: "I'M HOOK TO YOUR STORY", can't wait for more.

this story makes me happy.

i was going to say that it had the coolest beginning ever, but then realized that it had the coolest middle ever and the coolest ending ever. this is everything a short story should be. i used way too many vague contractions in that last run-on sentence.

Hah, loved this story before, love it even more now. And your updating again! Woohoo!

Keep it up.

he he, i found this story completely amusing. who knew cheetos could be so motivational. ah- the power of cheese.

you no what that was a great start im really looking forward to hearing more

update soonspider