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| crazy dog events 2006-11-17 ch 1,  | abuseIt's a really ambitious idea- a lovely, commendable idea- but I don't feel you quite pulled it off. And this is where I'm being unhelpful: I don't know why. One thing that was strange: Why 'Mond?' It seems to have little relevance. |
| KonekOniko 2006-08-26 ch 1, | abuseIt's so obvious and in our face, yet it's probably one of the most enigmatic and powerful pieces ever. Your work is incomparable. |
| Aimee Raven 2006-08-25 ch 1, | abuseHmm, haven't reviewed this, how odd. Oh well, I'm a b*tch, what can I say? This is really extraordinarily unique, but you know that, and really so macabre...really paints this *twisted* picture of war...made me shudder and feel slightly sick...utterly incredible. It's really one of those poems that leave you in a state of shock somehow. Great job. On the other hand, I wandered back to this poem because I was wondering where you'd gone to. It's been a while since you posted anything! Please keep writing! Love, Mia |
| Leaving Here 2006-08-11 ch 1, | abuseanother awesome creation.~Liz |
| SanMel KoTO 2006-08-10 ch 1, | abuseLove the word play. Seems like you enjoy it too, from your other stuff. Thats fun. |
| dollface and her cancer 2006-08-03 ch 1, | abusebrilliant. i have little else to say. |
| phoenixegg 2006-07-23 ch 1, | abuseI really like this poems even though I often find poems about war rather cliched. This adds a new perspective and is really well written. (: |
| Boadicia 2006-07-19 ch 1, | abuseWow. Powerful, clever, and so well written. A very, very unique poem. |
| poetic abortion 2006-07-16 ch 1, | abuseIt is intriquing and powerful and so amusing - lacing the German language in adds such a nice flavor to it - and I just love it; the referances, the blantant meaning to this, it is brought out so real and . . . well. It makes one love to hate it and vice-versa, which I find even more intriquing. ~* Noelle |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2006-07-16 ch 1, | abuseQuite intriguing, I enjoyed its use of words. |
| Manuel Fajar 2006-07-16 ch 1, | abuseEmancipated all our sins in Him, Our prophet leader and his reveries, Allowed time's grey our murders to make dim, While eagle banners red flew cloud eyries; Proud legions marched assorted in sundries, Unified mechanical bodies trim, Endless filed to horizon's distant rim, Having pledged lives and all their destinies; p.s Your poem has many bayonets piercing many shibboleths to tiny bits. m |
| Ohmm 2006-07-16 ch 1, | abuseThis is really fun in a depressing way; I find it prodigious how you make puns seemingly effortlessly and they actually mean something. |