whoa...harsh but awesome...

This was pretty good. It wasn't fantastic but it wasn't horrible either. It was pretty good. It kept me interested and reading, but like you said, it didn't go anywhere. However, it did do a good job conveying the character. With a bit more development, you would have a really deep, involved, character. The end was killer, and pretty awesome. With a little revision and expansion you might make this into a nifty novella that could convey a feeling as well as a character. Good job.