Very interesting. I thought it was slightly rushed but other than that it was fine. Keep writing!

o. i really like it so far. the mysterious hero. haha. it's lovely. i can't wait for more!

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Short chapter..huh? lol! It is still an excelent chapter, though. I love it :) I can't wait to see what happens next! Keep going!

Wishing you tasty ice cream,Kitty

OMT...this is awesome! It's so intense and I wonder who grabbed her! -shakes- hury up with more chappies! I have to know what happens! Nari doesn't die I hope ):..well of course not, it's only the first chapter. I wonder if she meets mermaids o_o. Anyways fluffly chocolate covered little gummy snakes, white chocolate bunny paws, and crossaints (sp?) smothered in butter, SJ

*makes "o"ing noises* Very good! Nice cliff hanger and descriptions! I can't wait to read more, so keep writing!

Wishing you peaceful sleep and yummy candy cars,

Kitty