Good effort darling. It was nice, but doesn't hold its own with your other works The rhyme scheme held you back in this piece, try more free verse or maybe blank verse _ Much love, and keep writing. The ideas and talent are there and we both know it :p Just let them flow out!

A very nice piece.

*loves you*

Don't know what else to say hun...

Hey there... I loved this... I can identify myself with it. Though a part sounded like the Christina A. song... I still loved it! Never stop writing, ok? And remember to notice the little details in life, they're usually the ones who delienate a smile upon your face.

ginnyellen