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| Fading Memories 2007-01-19 ch 1,  | abuseTell me about it... this feeling pretty much sucks, doesn't it? |
| S.C.R.E.A.M.I.N.G. 2006-12-21 ch 1, | abuseGreat, great job. I loved this, choppiness and all. Awesome, really. You just really kind of summed up thoughts that I've been having recently- and even if this isn't true, it could have fooled me. It seems to be just bursting with emotion. Amazing, really. --Ally |
| Complications 2006-09-05 ch 1, | abuseI don't think it's choppy it has style. and if a year is a day and day be a year, I believe you.I don't know if it has emotion, but it does have confustion(sp).um? i lost a thought... doesn't matter I have a date with death tommorrow (history exam) |
| lordelfy 2006-08-12 ch 1, | abuseThis isnt horrible, and I usually like choppy so i like this! |
| myheartbelongstosuperman 2006-08-07 ch 1, | abuseAnd really, who hasn't loved somebody they didn't have a chance with? I've never been in this exact situation, but I understand the feeling. Once again, a well-written poem that people can understand and relate to. Love it! |
| DemonicDestiny 2006-07-25 ch 1, | abuseGood poem. You described everything great. Keep writing. |
| ktoddhim 2006-07-21 ch 1, | abuseHi, Great poem. Keep up the awesome poetry writing! Katy |
| Color Me Eggshell 2006-07-21 ch 1, | abuseThe best peice of free-verse I've seen here in a while. It has flow and emotion, a really hard to find combination. Great job and I hope that things work out for you. |
| poisonbunny 2006-07-21 ch 1, | abuseaw . . . that's so sad =( |
| Kohnitz 2006-07-20 ch 1, | abusewow, Lizzy, I love this poem!! its so cute, and i love all the different words and feelings to it. Good job love always, ceecee |
| Mortifer Amor Phasmus 2006-07-19 ch 1, | abusechoppy yes, but I think that it shows the way your thinking. When you go through stuff like that your thoughts become very random, and well, choppy. truthfully I like this poem more for its realism, how you use life to create something beautiful. Quality work. |
| BranwenEithne 2006-07-18 ch 1, | abuseI like this kinda of poem because it's just raw emotion, stream-of-conscious kind of stuff flowing onto the paper. It's just bursting with meaning... and thanks so so much for reviewing my stuff. i really appreciate it! ~Jess |
| not-really-susan 2006-07-17 ch 1, | abuseWhat is this "I have never had a crush that lasted for more than a day"? Is that possible? I don't know. It struck me funny. :-) Interesting poem BTW |