Tell me about it... this feeling pretty much sucks, doesn't it?

Great, great job. I loved this, choppiness and all. Awesome, really. You just really kind of summed up thoughts that I've been having recently- and even if this isn't true, it could have fooled me. It seems to be just bursting with emotion. Amazing, really.
--Ally

I don't think it's choppy it has style. and if a year is a day and day be a year, I believe you.I don't know if it has emotion, but it does have confustion(sp).um? i lost a thought... doesn't matter I have a date with death tommorrow (history exam)

This isnt horrible, and I usually like choppy so i like this!

And really, who hasn't loved somebody they didn't have a chance with? I've never been in this exact situation, but I understand the feeling. Once again, a well-written poem that people can understand and relate to. Love it!

Good poem. You described everything great. Keep writing.

Hi,

Great poem. Keep up the awesome poetry writing!

Katy

The best peice of free-verse I've seen here in a while. It has flow and emotion, a really hard to find combination. Great job and I hope that things work out for you.

aw . . . that's so sad =(

wow, Lizzy, I love this poem!! its so cute, and i love all the different words and feelings to it. Good job

love always, ceecee

choppy yes, but I think that it shows the way your thinking. When you go through stuff like that your thoughts become very random, and well, choppy. truthfully I like this poem more for its realism, how you use life to create something beautiful. Quality work.

I like this kinda of poem because it's just raw emotion, stream-of-conscious kind of stuff flowing onto the paper. It's just bursting with meaning...

and thanks so so much for reviewing my stuff. i really appreciate it!

~Jess

What is this "I have never had a crush that lasted for more than a day"? Is that possible? I don't know. It struck me funny. :-) Interesting poem BTW