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| FuzzyGrapes 2006-09-21 ch 1,  | abuseThis is really beautiful ... ... I think you see things which I don't see in things =) |
| Aslan Israel 2006-08-23 ch 1, | abusesimply beautiful. |
| Hell's first Icicle 2006-08-12 ch 1, | abusewow. i read the summary and i thought of mi home where i grew up in the blue mountains, even though i live in the city now, so i read your poem with that feeling and, to me, ur poem was amazing. i loved the imagery, and the entire /feel/ of it. so much more peaceful, and happy, and "magic" than any dirty, crowded grey city where the people don't even smile at you when you help them and there's not a breath of fresh air or even just /grass/, for god's sake. your poem completely cheered me up from a ** day. cookies for you =D |
| Leaving Here 2006-08-08 ch 1, | abusei like it!! i like the first line and the last line and the middle line and oh, i like the whole thing. its great.~Liz |
| Aquafied 2006-08-07 ch 1, | abuseah, i love desert sunsets. almost as much as new mexican sunsets. mountains in a desert scene |
| liz anya 2006-08-01 ch 1, | abuseI love every detail of this poem... I love how to put an emphasis on the word "sky." It's a nice touch. |
| breezy nostrils 2006-07-23 ch 1, | abusei love the idea of driving into the sky. nice work. |
| classic violet 2006-07-18 ch 1, | abusebeautiful imagery. pretty and gorgeous, i love it. |
| boys kiss girls 2006-07-17 ch 1, | abuseuh-huh. it's true. when I was driving up to Blackfoot there was wild sunflowers all over the sides of the freeway. this poem is very visual. I like it. Great job, buddy. =) see you tomorrow...er... today. |
| ode to a firefly 2006-07-17 ch 1, | abuseYou know, I agree. Sometimes, when you're sitting in the Snake River Canyon with your feet dangling in the cool water, you just feel lucky to be here. Other kids are riding dirty metro trains to go downtown to a club where they're going to get wasted and then laid; but we're swimming and midnight then taking walks through cornfields. There's just nothing else like it in the entire world. ♥Christine |
| chaos called creation 2006-07-17 ch 1, | abusesigh, if only we could drive into the sky. that would be sick :) thanks for your review and the cc! the poem is basically told in a child's point of view about her parent's relationship and whether trusting someone is a weak or a strong thing to do. keep writing~ |
| Victim of Reality19 2006-07-17 ch 1, | abuseCool poem...I like the imagery you created and the way it flows...I like the last 3 lines the best...amazing!! |
| Winter Sun 2006-07-17 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful descriptions, imagery, and observations (i.e.'it looks like you can drive into the sky'). You keep it simple, and don't put a lot of detail on it, which is nice in this case. Short, but sweet, and speaks volumes. I really like the first two lines! (The little sun-picture at the top of your poem is cute, too). |
| coal and marigolds 2006-07-17 ch 1, | abuseReally, really great imagery. Wonderful poem. |