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I Dream of Scotland 2006-10-06 ch 2,	abuseCute story you have here. I'll be watching to see where this goes... :)
tricklingdust 2006-08-14 ch 2, anon.	abuseI'm still reading and only to find you keep getting better. :) I love this story and encourage you to update as quickly as possible!
Historical Me 2006-08-11 ch 2,	abuseI'm so sorry I haven't reviewed sooner- it's been over a week since you updated. (Actually I've been in Scotland so it was nice to read this after coming home). I love the way you write. It's the perfect balance between description and narrative with a nice amount of dialogue thrown in. When I reread the first chapter, I realised what you meant by 'second' too. Second of the two most important men... That was just me being stupid! Since my first review was so short and unhelpful, I'd better write some constructive criticism. But since I haven't got any proper criticism to make, I'll just say that sometimes you use a full stop in speech, then use a capital eg."You know I don’t like it when ye help, Miss Maura.” He stated". Obviously that's just your choice and it doesn't really matter at all, it's just that usually there's a comma and no capital, but I don't know which is grammatically correct or if there even is a rule about it. It doesn't affect the story at all though, which is brilliant! Oh, you can just ignore all of that. My favourite character is Tam at the moment. He's so sweet. Update soon!Historical Me
Michelle Habibi 2006-08-04 ch 2,	abuseooh!! this is getting good! i like this story! if you update again, i promise i'll review! im a litle surprised you dont have a lot of reviews yet because this story is great, but im sure you will in a litle while since you've just started this story. see you till next time! -Michelle Habibi
kristy23 2006-07-20 ch 1,	abuseThis is really very good. Your writing is wonderful, and your writing style is very clear. A little bit wordy, but it fits. You did very well with your descriptions, and your dialouge. Reading this was like watching a movie play out in my head. Don't be discouraged if you don't get many reviews. This is a wonderful piece of writing, and it promises to become a wonderful story. You might want to work on your summary a bit, however. Anyway, great story. I loved how you went about addressing the rulers in your story; i thought there was an appropriate amount of drama and respect in your tone, espically when you mentioned the dates and all their titles. Keep up the great work, I'm sure this will only get better.
Historical Me 2006-07-19 ch 1,	abuseThis is an excellent start to what's promising to be an excellent story. Great use of adjectives and it flows like a published book. I was only slightly confused by this sentence(s) 'my protector for the first twenty years of my life. And the second?' Do you mean the second twenty years? Very clever title and great historical references.Update soon. Historical Me

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