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| EmptynessFilled 2007-02-16 ch 1,  | abuseFirst off, i noticed that this story didn't have reviews, and it was uploaded on my 17th birthday! So, I chose this as my first story of yours to review. I love the rhythm. You have a rhythm, which is so important in poety. Even though it's not perfect end rhyme, and often no rhyme, it has a pace and rhythm. Next, the message. Seeing in your profile that you are an Athiest Democrat(nothing wrong with it, I'm just completely opposite), I was actually pleasantly surprised at the message. Sure, it's a little dark, but the fact that we cannot possibly know everything, especially what happens after we die was developed perfectly. And I agree. Great poem. |