First off, I'd like to commend your narrative style...it is very in-your-face and vivid. Your detail is also very meticulous as well, but I would caution you on one thing. The POV you write from is very detatched (i.e. you tell instead of show). Many plot objects could be shone through events instead of text. For example, instead of telling me in the beginning about the wars and history of your world, explain it instead through conversations characters have, the traditions they carry, and so on. I know this advice is a bit late in the series now, but in the future, consider a form of exposition that involves the reader more. As I was being told everything I needed to know here, I didn't feel as involved in the story as I could have. All together, however, I applaud your hard effort. Keep up the good work!