Glad you updated at last! I felt really sorry for James in the first scene, but I guess that's half the fun - watching Jo unconsciously torture him while he not-so-secretly pines for her. I hope Michael turns out to be a jerk... not prejudiced much, though, really ;) Update again soon! Sometimes putting a story on hold for long periods of time can interrupt the flow, from my experience, so you might want to keep that in mind.

Hi! I can't believe I didn't notice this was up sooner. I'm so glad you updated, because man, I needed a break to read and this was perfect for doing that. Never mind all that work I've got to do for school. School's a killer with all that homework and stuff. But anyway, on for my review. Wow this chapter was just beautiful! I loved every little tidbit of it. And I totally agree with Josie the version of "Little Women" with Winona Ryder topped all three. I love that version, cause all the other actors just lacked that "Jo-ness" that Alcott created in Jo. Wonderful chapter. I truly do hope you can update as soon as your schedule calms down a bit. This is very good. Also, guess what?

I've finally put a new story, coincidently on the same day you put this one up and I'd really apreciate it if you read the first chapter (the only one at the moment) and tell me what you think of it. It's called, "Daddy's Baby Girl" and I'm hoping you'll like it. I'm so sorry I didn't check out your story earlier. I'm putting it on my favorite's list so I don't forget again. I feel horrible.

~Lacy~

Yay, the entrance of Laurie! I love the name James. It's classic yet creative. . .so many nicknames for it =) Ok, so I've a couple comments/criticisms after reading this chapter.

I think I need to see more of Jo's background, her family, etc - these things will have shaped her into the young woman she is, much as Alcott's Jo was shaped by the dynamics in her home with her sisters and parents. So far I've just got Chrissie for reference, which is good, but it would be easier to empathize with your Jo if I knew why she has this sharp independent streak.

Maybe that will come in later chapters that I haven't read)

One other thing to keep in mind: when you describe James's hair as falling into his eyes 'dreamily', the reader isn't sure what you mean. Hair can't fall dreamily of its own volition, of course; are you saying that James's hair falling into his eyes looks like a dream to the girls? It's easy to dash off little descriptive passages that don't make sense upon re-reading (I do it all the time). . .so you might want to watch for those.

I can't wait to see Josie&James develop their friendship though ;)

Okay! This is like the THIRD time I've reviewed because FP is acting weird. Grr! Hmm okays. I liked this chapter, because it gave some insight on Chryssie's character and it described her personality even more. I liked that, because since this is mainly about Josie, you still found a way to make Chryssie a more "palpable" character. I liked how you also described the relationship between she and her brother who I thought was really very sweet to do that for her. I mean how nice could you be? I would have been liek there's way to many people for just some random singer's signature or somehting. And I also liked how you were able to describe her friends, Taylor and Katie... as well. Good job! Well since this is like the 3rd time I've reviewed this, the review has decreased in length. My condolences. Gr!

~ Lacy

PS Also I've updated Superficially Honest with a new chapter : Chapter 8 Lackadaisical Fathers and Laissez Faire. Subdiv. #1. So if you want to, you could head over there and check it out. Thanks so much for all your other reviews. I really love them!

PSS I really hope this review goes through, because having to do this a fourth time would really stink...Oh and please update soon, I'm looking forward to more of this. Especially since even though I liked this chapter, I missed Josie immensely.

Glad you got past that two chapter rut, because I was so waiting for another chapter and then I come like days late to read it. Aw well the wait only made this read even better. Josie reminds me so much of a friend of mine its not even funny. Its scary really. I like her end line "He's not my Laurie." that was just perfect. Good job! Also I have updated as well. Jolly gladness. So go check it out.

~ beckers & lacy

Oh this one was funny. The melting ice cream - definitely a distinguished entrance for your grown-up Jo.

I'm wondering if she has sisters and if "Laurie" will be her neighbor. . . but yeah I could wonder a lot of things plot-wise so I'll wait and see.

Jo donning foreign accents also really reminded me of Alcott's character.

=)

ah! someone's doing this! great idea.

your jo is pretty feisty so far. . .looking good.

Hey,

Lacy here. First off, thanks for the review, and thanks for being honest in your review. It helps me immensely. I think this was a great chapter, and I liked how even though this is sort of like a transition from her being a little girl (can't remember the age) to now being 18 -- the transition was smooth. Good job. Yeah I read the 1995 version of Little Women as well, and I wasn't happy about the ending either. lol...anyway kep up the good work! And keep updating.

~ God Bless

Lacy

Hey,

It's Lacee. Wow, I loved that book "Little Women" anyway this is really very good. I like how she's the modern version of Joesephine. I think that's an awesome description in of itself. Nice job! idk as you can see my brain is dead, and I'm already running out of words to say, though I know just exactly what a well rounded critique is supposed to be like. Sorry I'm rambling as usual. Anyway Great intro. I hope you continue this, and thanks a million for those encouraging reviews. I really enjoyed reading them, and by the way I've updated Superficially Honest, if you wanna check it out.

Great Beginings are sure to have even better endings. So do continue to this. I wanna read more of it.

~Lacee