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| jadeisms 2006-11-09 ch 10,  | abuse*standing ovation major appluading jump for joy jade-like action inserted here* now that was a truly magnificent story... it has the seal of massive approval from meh! love always, the jadeisms... |
| Bob Evans 2006-09-30 ch 10, | abuseI'm impressed. You did good on this. The grammer of course could've used improvement, some of your ideas could have been conveyed better, and a few things just didn't make sense; but the plot was good, the story was interesting, and the end was well worth the read... ~Bob Evans |
| TT-da-lamanite 2006-09-30 ch 9, | abuseThis is a review from both Bob Evans and TT-da-lamanite: AHAH!Sydney's dead?!?!?!?! AHHAHHAHAHAHAHAH! I like the way you named it the Ethan Cole Project... AH!This was a great chapter (although the mind battles were of...curious nature). AH! I'm done p.s. make sure kenzi gets tortured. |
| Bob Evans 2006-09-28 ch 8, | abuse:) You've really put yourself up in this chapter. "Great leader" "they weren't doing so well without him" Anyways, like where this going. ~Bob Evans |
| Bob Evans 2006-09-27 ch 7, | abuseSo, you created alter egos of yourselves? Called Tree Top and Butler? Or was that just an easter egg in the story? Anyways, looks good. Has Jon killed you yet about chapter 6? ~Bob Evans |
| Bob Evans 2006-09-27 ch 6, | abuseFour words; don't let jon see. Otherwise, interesting turn for the characters. They seem to speak with a much more prophetic approach, and it seems that mysteries are beginning to be solved... Keep writing!! ~Bob Evans |
| Bob Evans 2006-09-25 ch 5, | abuseWow, good back drop story. However, you said that they used Rachel's DNA to create their perfect mutant, and that they created several experiements (at least five I counted). But, she was only just kidnapped. Does this mean they created all these experiements in only a couple of days...? Sorry if I confused you. I still like it... ~Bob Evans |
| Bob Evans 2006-09-24 ch 4, | abuseCliffhanger! Yea, good work. Although, it is interesting that as soon as Jon and Kenzi are alone that they go at. Am looking forward to #5, keep writing. ~Bob Evans P.S. hope Jon didn't hurt you too bad. |
| Bob Evans 2006-09-23 ch 3, | abuseLOLOLOLOLOLOL! I loved how Jon and Kenzi got together, and I now understand the whole Yendys thing. Keep writing. ~Bob Evans |
| TT-da-lamanite 2006-09-22 ch 2, | abusei lkie how you did my powers.i bve cool |
| Bob Evans 2006-09-22 ch 2, | abuseAh, I wondered how long it would take you to bring Kenzi into this story. So glad to see chapter 2 finally out...it's been a LONG wait... ~Bob Evans |
| TT-da-lamanite 2006-08-26 ch 1, | abusehey what teh heck leave me at a cliff hanger then not work on it? what kinda crap is that you evil idoit. anyways work on it and submit the next chapter...soon, or die |
| Bob Evans 2006-07-21 ch 1, | abuseHa ha! Finally you have started another story. I don't know what happened to Lord of the planes, but it's good to start reading your next fic. I wonder if this one takes place in Pierre too... |