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| LuckyCharm.698 2007-07-03 ch 1,   | Strong opinion and idea but the rhythms kind of off. i enjoyed it though! |
| simpleplan13 2006-08-04 ch 1, | I like a lot of parts of this, but I dont think it flows well together.. the wish thing & the mother thing dont relaly go together in my mind.. adn the ending about being beautifully ugly is amazing but comes out of nowhere... I think the different parts need more of a easing into them.. or maybe make them into separate pieces? ::Shrug:: jsut my opinion.. I do really like it though... |