This is an engaging story... please update whenever...

Continue this one day:)

And a loyal follower I shall stay :):)

Queen, I am now a certified fan of your work. This was a stellar introduction to the story, different from the norm and a great hook.

It reminded me a bit of the opening moments in Aladdin... :o) Haha. Anyway, on to the next chapter...

oh, im enjoying this already!

beautifully written much more mature than the fictionpress general audience

FYI to the reviewer below; an apostrophe is a direct address to someone not present. In this case, the reader. That style is rather trying, but it has improved a lot in my opinion.

this is really good, if a bit eerie. well, keep it up, i'm dying to hear more, Mademoiselle Anabella!

i very much like this story. the style is interesting. usually i find this sort of "fly-on-wall" perspective a little trying. but kudos, very good.

a couple times you missed the "in" in jeannine.

natali k. a.

I find your writing style to be very unique, which I adore, but I'd just like to warn you that at times I believe you become too caught up in the story to realize your sentences aren't flowing smoothly. For instance, your use of commas, which I remember seeing another reviewer call apostrophes, is a little sketchy at times. But I'm afraid that particular sentence makes me appear a rather big hypocrite. =)

I have very much enjoyed your story so far, and I look forward to reading the next chapter.

Interesting. I love the description of Fleur's clothing.

Okay, so I realize that apostrophe is a literary device, and I know that it's been used successfully before in works of literary merit.

But you're taking it too far. "Dear reader, I realize that you are not a cat, and so your eyes cannot see in the dark. For this reason, dear reader, I will light a figurative gas lamp for you with my figurative match on the street, and this figurative gas lamp will illuminate the scene for you, dear Reader."

I'm going to try reading the second chapter because I'm interested in where this is going, but if the apostrophe stays as tackily strong as it is in this chapter, I'm probably not going to keep reading.

You don't know how happy I am to find a new chapter of "The Muse". This story has amazing writing, and I'd love to see you finish it eventually.
So when is the next chapter coming out?

Very good chapter. I'm combining two reviews, and also reviewing Land Of Red II. I really can't wait to see what happens to both heriornes!

--Kira Love

you have such interesting characters and i love the way you write, so detailed yet so simple. I wish you'd update more often. :(

Very neat introduction. Sounds promising. :)

-Ramen