Reviews for We're not together

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onesongglory23 2008-04-08 ch 20,	abuseTotally amazing story. It was remarkably well-written, and the plot was fantastic. Muy Bien.
anitsirK 2008-03-18 ch 20,	abuseWonderful read. Just a bit fast-paced. You could have dramatized it more. :D But all in all it was good :)
manderschica13 2007-12-31 ch 20,	abuseoh my gosh! I loved it! It was so cute, and perfect!! My heart broke when I read the part about george beating up jared! He saved up for 6 months?? And George thought he wasn't good enough? shows what george knows. George was a bum. But other than that... I loved it!
Free To Be Imperfect 2007-11-27 ch 20,	abuseI genrally make it a point not to read chapter stories because I lose interest but I can honestly say this is one of the best if not the best story I have read on this site. Chapter and not. It was cute,sweet,funny,and dramatic without being to much of any particular one. I really, really ejoyed it.
LadyLush 2007-11-03 ch 20,	abusewow i loved this story! they were so stupid at times lol but yay they got together in the end! lol great story x
cherrystraw 2007-08-16 ch 20,	abuseThis is an awesome story! I hope you'll keep writing more stories!
TwoHeadedMountainGoat 2007-06-15 ch 20,	abuseYou reviewed my story so I feel I should do the same for you.(Not that it was any sort of burdening obligation though - I loved reading this. In fact I just started it and didn't stop until I finished.) Anyway what I liked most about this was the fact that it was the perfect length (some people just go on and on until you lose interest)and I felt like you knew exactly where you were taking it. Basically it just seemed like you were in control and everything fit together so nicely. And of course, there was so much romantic tension it was like an out of control pressure cooker. Any way, various comments in no particular order; I liked the Ken doll thing. that was creative. And the Hari Krishna line, it made me laugh. And the underpants with no crutch for convenience. bahahaha. During the beginning of the "You screwed my sister" chapter, I kept invisaging Mel walking out of the surgery, Jared asking 'is it mine?' and the receptionist (who thought he was the brother) thinking she'd just stumbled across a really nasty case of incest. It was so cool and familiar to see Australian place names thrown in there. It was also so fitting that mr perfect Eric would come from Surfers. Surfers Paradise is like this 'unbelievably good looking' person colony, and it's sickening. After a week there last year I got to the point where I wanted to fall to my knees in the middle of the shopping centre (where I was assualted by one fit, tanned body walking towards me after another) and scream 'find me an ugly person!!' Anyway, yes, very enjoyable. Although I'm not sure about the ending.I thought that the dirt bike accident was so much of a cliched sort of climax that it was actually an anti climax. I don't know. It felt a little too predictable and "Home and Away" ish for me. But, then again, this is Fictionpress, and cliches are what most of us are after anyway.
ihrtbks 2007-06-01 ch 20,	abuseThis story is very entertaining, especially how you made her pregnant to force Jared and Mel together. GREAT STORY!
sussex 2007-03-28 ch 1,	abusegood it had the grandma pushing them
ERfanatic1994 2007-01-13 ch 20,	abuseKoolio
siddika 2007-01-05 ch 1,	abuseGOOD STORY.
siddika 2007-01-05 ch 3,	abuseI LOVE IT.
atreyu love 2006-12-31 ch 20,	abuselol. serves George right XD
atreyu love 2006-12-31 ch 18,	abuseGo to sleep mel. XD
atreyu love 2006-12-31 ch 14,	abuseaw

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