This was good. Interesting, a bit darker looking than what I had originally think Xerox would be.

By the way, Chapter four of Galaxy Warrior Shon is up.

This is a great beginning to what I'm sure will be a great story. Just make sure to use a few more adjectives and be descriptive and you'll be fine.

I like your summary for this story. I like it so far, I'm interested to hear more about this Dark kid, that's for sure.