creative. i kinda like this.

the rhythm and rhyme of the piece was well done.

good work. )

I really like it... You pant a cool picture. VEry good word flow. Paul Simon would be proud! :D

Wow. The rythm in this is absolutely stunning. You make rhyming seem so easy. It reminds me a little of a little kids' nursery rhyme, but with deeper meaning. Amazing.

I love this! It flows beautifully. D

Of course, my very favoritest poem evver! yep yep, your amazing. I want more poems! -chuckles greadily- muahaha...

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jk. Kudos! :-)

Haha, I like the flow of it. You might want to add on some more, cuz there's definitely room for it.