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| bittersweet.season 2006-08-12 ch 1,  | abusethis was really beautifully done and ended well. "But ink is like blood: so thick and itStains—the smell as wonderful as theDeath of the deranged. Look at me pretty—Look at me well, for I never speak of whatI can’t tell." amazing. x |
| Leaving Here 2006-08-02 ch 1, | abusei love the ending. i really like how you write. ~Liz |
| Edgar Wellington 2006-07-22 ch 1, | abuseAs poetry goes this is not as compelling as some of your other stuff. But as confessional and description of the life of me it is interesting. This moves like a four dimensional roller coaster. The begining is frustratingly vague. What legacies? Why did they die? Who killed them? It seems that smiles become the avenue of lies. A silent truth is one that can not be heard...or can not be spoken of...but must be played. And then we ride through the less caring daydreamer...doodler...I love that forth stanza "Flirting noise that pours forth fake" Attitude! Then you get into the reader's face "Look at me well". I can relate to feeling beyond or past or unsimilar to one's contemporaries. I can relate to being conquered by hungery hands... I can also relate to a certain optimism, an optimism in the dark knowledge that ultimately one does have control of one's own life. |
| Chidaruma Kamisori 2006-07-21 ch 1, | abuseNice, the images are veary real! Thanks for the review! peace Lily |
| multiples of six 2006-07-21 ch 1, | abuseThis must probably be the first poetic essay I've ever read. And I like it, yes I do. It gives the impression of a person who is an individual, kind of quirky, intelligent, with a love of language. And the rhyming is so subtle I didn't even notice it until halfway through - which means it's great, in my book. Anyway - very nicely written. As I said,.. I like it! =) |