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| Moontan 2006-08-26 ch 1, | abuseGenerally I don't like first person stories; but I think you have a good handle on what this PoV needs. And a cliff hanger like this is likely to keep readers hooked. The description is also good; enough to give a feel for the story, but not so much that the reader gets lost or bored. :) |
| Saleinaenachiya 2006-07-22 ch 1, | abuseThis is a great story i love the detail and the names of course! anyway i think you should continue this i want to know if he does end up finding the guy or whoever the hell it was that bit her i guess? I love how he seems so sympathetic to her, even though hes a vampire. Its a great story! please update soon! -Saleinaenachiya |
| Afourletterlie 2006-07-22 ch 1, | abusethis is really interesting. that sucks for isis since she's going through all this torture. |