KAREN!

-::rips out hair::-

...please, hurt her.

Nice chapter...but too bad Andre died. Well, I'll look forward to the next!

Ah, it's been a while, ne? Anyway, I loved this chapter. This may be the best one so far. The thing with Karen...I so wasn't expecting it, but that makes it even better. I can't wait to see where you go from here. ^_^

I finally read your new chapters! Yay! I hate Karen too from the beginning, and I knew she was up to no good. Is she somehow related to Absence or the girl from the earlier chapter?

Hey,

It's me again. I'm to down on the dumps to give a proper review. Uhh...thanks for the review. I will review again, but in a better mood. I really don't care about the mistakes on this chapter, but I check for it in the next chapter. Keep it up. Till next time

adaku-chan

Nice chapter!

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You think that everyone's possessive now, wait 'till later! That's funny Yuki and Okuni tapdancing! (I just got a mental picture!)

Does Iri ever speak? Does Karen ever stop smiling? Mega mega sorry for not reading in a long while! ~_~

Yeah thanks for the review. Alright I'm not gonna yell at ya but...YOU NEED DETAILS. The dialouge is nice, but I don't know where the setting or you didn't explained what the characters are feeling with details. "

Hey, if they can make stuff like that appear from nowhere, that do you think that they could make food appear too"

(You forgot the period on that sentence on the bottom.) See when you add little details people cannot see or visual the setting and what's happening to the chapters. But if you add too much details -like me. It might confuse others. So yeah. Little details can be annoying or helpful, depends on the person reading it. Till next time

adaku-chan

The dialouge was way too extenisve (sp?) or long on this chapter. I keep seeing that in stories like this in the manga section. Sorry didn't mean to point fingers at you, just tried of seeing chapters that have people talking through the whole thing without enough details. Oh well, I really don't care as much. I have a life. On the other hand, there are strong points at this. And I likek it. keep it up. till next time

adaku-chan

That was a great chapter! I loved the flashback, and seeing the insight into Absence's character. I love Iri. No idea why, I just do. But a brilliant chapter all the same, we always love our flashback chapters!

Just a couple of mistakes to point out. You sometimes messed up your 'your' and you're', although only on occasion. E.g. '“This is all you’re fault! It was you kind that caused the Blast!”', the 'you're' should be 'your', and then the 'you' should be 'your'. And occasionally your 'then' and 'than' would be slightly off. But apart from that everything was great and I cannot wait to read more - so update soon! 'Cause you said before you're looking forward to the next chapter, right? Oh... exciting!

First chapter caught my attention. Very very hilarious scenes... i find it rare to read stories that could really make me laugh...^_^ I like your stories...

I'm going to read the rest of the chapters...and review again...really nice work...'three thumbs up!'

[Oh...and please rnr my works,too..]

Wow...please keep going.

She could almost see him smiling at her, in the memory that never happened.

I loved that opening. It was just really good. Another good update, although I have to admit I got a bit confused with separating flashback from present. Maybe I'm just being stupid...? But anyway, cool update!

Wow! Incredibly well written. A very different chapter than the past ones... but I like it!! It adds a good balance. All stories need a good dose of light and darker tones! Just be sure to spell check some words ran together (which could be part of the upload on the web though), and proof read. Aside from that I'm excited to see what comes next! Keep up the awesome work!

Sorry it's taken so long to review. I LOVED this chapter! Cain and Valerie's relationship is hillarious. I really like Cain. Your writing is getting better and better and I'm really interested in seeing what's brewing with Father and everyone! Keep it up!