I read the 1st chapter of your story which I have to say is really good! :)...I'm guessing English isn't your first language(ha! neither it is mine) but seriously good work here!

Wait, wouldn't Emily have recognised Aeron as the demon that she got Kulula to bring her to earlier?

You know, a minor plot hole would be that since Emily fell asleep, Kulula might have used that chance to attack her, you know. I know that as a demon, if I were to get caught and threatened and possibly die later, I would be desperate and try my best to take any chance I get to run away.

I'm starting to like Kulula, don't ask me why. :P

Again, language. You know what? I really don't mind helping you beta read, if you want. PM me please! The story or words won't change much, since, honestly, your descriptions and everything else is good, it's just that occasionally you have missing words in your sentences, wrong spelling or wrong vocabulary. Other than that, the quality is much better than anything I was expecting. :D

Again, language. And again, I like what happens so far. :D It's not like one of those really really lame stories, yay!

Wow, your built up and is fairly interesting, even if this 'concept' is a little unoriginal. I would say I was interested in reading more, but a major turn off for me would be that you need a beta-reader. Either that or double-check your story more thoroughly. In the first paragraph alone I can spot many vocabulary and grammar mistakes. I felt that you were trying to draw in the readers into the story, and I would say you did it, except for the English. (Sorry, have a thing about that.)

Very nicely done intro, it really draws in the readers and gets them hooked. The words paint an incredibly vivid and detailed picture of the scene, and the action feels very quick and fluid. I'm really looking forward to see what's next for Emily and Kulula. Great start for a new story.

It is a good story. People are just too lazy to put up a review. Its got suspense and I like it. And anyways, if people don't like your story, as long as you like your story than you should put it up.Write more! ^-^