that was awesome. you made it sound so natural and more realistic, something that would happen in everyday life. (i'm a fan of romance stories and reading them make my love life sound like shit. i don't think crushing is counted as love'life. i have no love life or life whatsoever)

great beginning~

Oh God. This made me cry, a little.
I'm not even that emotional.
-shakes head-

This is beautiful.
Beautiful in every shape and form.

I'm looking at this, and I guess I'm maybe "crying" (its actually only like tears welling up and some escaping) because I'm kinda in this position now.

Minus the whole "i found you" part.
Because so far, we haven't really talked that much.

But I can relate to this.
I am relating to this.

It's just, woah.
And, at the moment, I'm jealous of you.
For writing this down.

I feel this way. It's just so amazing.

It's so true. I can't even explain myself with out sounding idiotic, so I guess I'll leave it at:

this is beautiful.

kthnxbai,

Martin the Waterskier

wow that was a really intresting read. also i can't wait for HeavenBound. Your sister's HellBound is great. Well good luck with the writting I love it.

wow...this was amazing! i loved it! it was seriously a great story and i cant wait for the chronicles to be continued! anyways, on another note, its nice to know that there are other people from FanFictionDotNet on FictionPress, too. Im sorry I havent read any of your stories on though...they look wicked good, but i havent had any time to read them, lol. I'll get around to it...eventually...
AnimeGirl329

hey whassup? this was great i loved it. it's a great plot line that you get this as a beginning and that several stories come off it. I can't wait to see where this goes. i like how you have a nice contrast between things. It has a nice balance.You have a wonderful way with words when you write. You make it seems like you're there and that's a good thing.This is definitely on of my favorites (clicked the add to favorites button)...The past, present, and future points pop out a bit in the wrong places but otherwise it couldn't be better.Update your chronicles soon.-TAD/Phoenix/BFPwow, too many pennames

Heya!

It finally let's me read your stories. Yay! Hurrahh!! ~pouts~ Twas being evil before

That was a good story. Really liked it. Makes you kinda think. ^.^ It's good, different from stuff I've read.

Love it! Write more!

Lotsaluv

Lettuce

Howdy cuzzirine! Sup yo? Chilling? That's good. ^_^

A nice piece you got here. It really makes you think about fate and whether you believe in it or not, and how the way life works is so damn funny.

Me, cuz, I wanna read more, eh? XD Update soon.

konfizkate91

Hey AG

just like I said, I'm here to read and review, I'm not a member here so excuse me for my unsigned review.

Just i always say, I always loved ur writings and it doesn't stop me from liking it better. It just does. Another piece of your good work! Keep it up!

and ignore me if i go rambling, I was kinda not into reading at first but I read. and liked it too

Masha

You posted something! *dances around like a maniac*

Uhm yes, ignore me--I just had a giant coffee and a donut. Sugar and caffeine do weird things.

Yes, story. It's an excellent start of one. I like the fate angle (yes yes, so I'm a bit biased on that, sue me). The title is interestingly quirky, if that makes any sense.

Over all, there were no major grammar issues to point out, and I like the writing style. The usage of the one character's thoughts are always an interesting way to write--it sheds light on the character without ever having to explicitly say stuff, and it flows well in that stream of consciousness way.

I don't usually comment on plot because I think it's the author's right to do whatever the hell they feel like doing--but I make exceptions. I actually really like your plot idea. FP is *full* of stories like: girl + brother's best friend magically fall in love, the geeky girl gets the popular jock, and the billion coincidences lead to happily ever after. Not that there's anything wrong with the cliche...that *is* what AFD is after all, but sometimes you just need something different.

So yes, I like the plot, style etc. and I look forward to reading the rest. I also apologize for the madly long, rambly, possibly non-sensical review :)

*offers AG a cookie*

Danica

:) You made the change. It's wickedly awesome, and you know that I love your writing.

So yeah, I likey lots. I'm looking forward to you updating this (like everything else)

It's true I suppose, that love usually starts off as something so tiny and unnoticable. And then BAM! :O

It's there.

Hehe.

Update soon please! Updates feed my hungry soul.

Luna-chan.

Ps: I wasn't joking.

Darn FP T.T

Second go. I already told you this piece of work has it's own voice, aura, call it what you will. So do your other parts/chapters. They make you want more(or in my case, crave).You write love as it should be, no falling at first glance or something fancy like that.I fell in love myself that way. And the you in this prologue, adorable.

I can't wait for the other pieces, love!(so you better keep it up and don't starve me).

-Kani-

funny, this is how i think everyone find their "everything". that's how i found mine. yeah, it helped that he kept asking me out for like every beforehand, but still, i slowly became friends with him, and slowly fell in love, not realizing when we started to become more than friends. it's amazing, because i think that's how it should work with everyone. otherwise, it seems forced.

i hope to read more