Ooh, I like it! Vampire stories are way overdone, but this looks like being a unique spin on things. The main character is a good one- the young kid who's smarter and more observant than most of the adults, I like those :). The creepy description of the cursed house I liked too. The only trouble I had was with the beginning. Just the first paragraph's a little confusing, and it sounds like she's kind of arguing with herself mentally. I think you could cut that out without taking away from it, but whatever.

:)Kitten

This is not bad at all. I still enjoy your stuff, and hopefully this one is as good as The Puppeteer. I'm looking forward to it.

Raymond

creepy, scary man. . ah! If I was Peter, that cat could just stay at that house for all that matters. I would not set foot in that yard.

I'd like to see which way the plot is going..sounds good already! I like how you jump from one person's point of view to another...gives you a real insite to everybody's personality. Great job!

I'll leave this as a review for both chapters.

It's story so far and it's keeping me interested. I can't blame the two girls, I'd run too if the house was considered haunted. That would scare me to ! For I must read more!

Nice beginning. I'm intrigued to see what happens next.