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| fire-breathing-kitten 2006-07-31 ch 1,  | abuseOoh, I like it! Vampire stories are way overdone, but this looks like being a unique spin on things. The main character is a good one- the young kid who's smarter and more observant than most of the adults, I like those :). The creepy description of the cursed house I liked too. The only trouble I had was with the beginning. Just the first paragraph's a little confusing, and it sounds like she's kind of arguing with herself mentally. I think you could cut that out without taking away from it, but whatever. :)Kitten |
| RRF 2006-07-28 ch 1, | abuseThis is not bad at all. I still enjoy your stuff, and hopefully this one is as good as The Puppeteer. I'm looking forward to it. Raymond |
| MoonFire-01 2006-07-25 ch 3, | abusecreepy, scary man. >.< ah! If I was Peter, that cat could just stay at that house for all that matters. I would not set foot in that yard. |
| Caylei 2006-07-24 ch 2, | abuseI'd like to see which way the plot is going..sounds good already! I like how you jump from one person's point of view to another...gives you a real insite to everybody's personality. Great job! |
| MoonFire-01 2006-07-24 ch 2, | abuseI'll leave this as a review for both chapters. It's story so far and it's keeping me interested. ^^ I can't blame the two girls, I'd run too if the house was considered haunted. That would scare me to death.Update! For I must read more! ^^ |
| Translucent Darkness 2006-07-23 ch 1, | abuseNice beginning. I'm intrigued to see what happens next. |