I love this, the whole absurdist postmodern stream of consciousness thing is awesome. I like how you combined so many things for some very powerful imagery. You are a wonderful writer.

Hmm.. Humorous horror? The genre got me hooked. (Sorry, title!)

At first I didn't think I understood this (I was too busy imagining the sentences in stanzas-- I don't do that for fun, I swear! I've never done it before until I started reading your works. Your poetic flowery language-- that's what I'll blame.) but I read it through again and I think I have a grasp on it, but I don't want to say because it's probably completely wrong, so instead of being embarrassed I'll just keep it to myself x)

There were just a few "miswords" where you have one word but I think you meant another, like "...where friendly fire in unacceptable." I believe you meant "is" instead of "in?" And I must say, I did not find that monster funny.

This is certainly a challenge. I do love the poetic language.

Daily life is like a war, I suppose.

I like very, very much the way this is written, but I want more of it...

This seems much more poetry than prose to me, but that's just me :) You've got some amazing visuals here and good language.