I wish you didn't kill Sarah.

You have some spelling errors and slight grammatical errors to fix.

I guess it made sense, but it was so very dark...

Damn. That was really good.

This is powerful stuff... I'm going to definitely keep reading. The dream seemed like a real nightmare someone would have - traumatic and not making an ounce of sense. Good job, keep writing!

Well. The first and last horror story I will ever read. It took a lot out of me. That stuff scares me spiritually.

What happened to Delilah, Kenny and Sara?

You know who Sara seems like to me? Rosanne's daughter Sara (from the show) the sarcastic one with dark hair. A cross between her and Ozzy Osborne's daughter...

First, a disclaimer: I would never normally read horror stories. But I have to stick with this one til it's over. I'm hooked.

"Calmly, Delilah ripped the drawers open..."How do you calmly rip a drawer? I think "pulled" might be better.

Allright, so you've managed to turn this creepy little story into an I hate zombies-a-thon. That isn't a bad thing but...just try to not let this story fall victim to the millions of other corny zombie stories/movies. One more thing, you should try to review the people that are reviewing you. I mean, if you don't, they don't really have any motivation to reveiw you anymore. If you review them back, it tells them that you took time out of your busy life to read thier review, and they know that you took it into account. So, try not to let this one go downhill.

Yikes! Delilah killed her brother?

Well this story really held my interest, with its twist at the end. Good read!

Whew! You got me now. Post SOON!

I am definitely intrigued by the characters in this story. Definitely a good read.

My only question is: why is Sara still in high school with Kenny? If she was Delilah's friend and Delilah was 18 when she died, I would thik that her friends would be approximately the same age, which would make Sara about 20 years old to Kenny's age of 17. Also , I find it a bit hard to swallow that a beautiful girl would take her brother to the prom, and still become prom queen. That wouldn't be hard to change, but Sara's age will be a sticky one.

Anyway, nice read. Looking forward to more...

Again, not a bad chapter. I liked how this one shows the love between Kennith and Deliah, and how he's willing to die becuase of how much he misses her.

Not a bad start. The prologue did what it was intended to do, drag you into the story. I liked how in the first chapter, how you demonstrated the characters' lives, instead of plunging into the story. I always hate it when writers do that, you never really feel what the characters are thinkning. Of course...I do that, so I guess that I need to stop, or slow down, eh? Sorry, didn't mean to ramble, I just wanted to say that it's of to a good start.

Hi Veromorphia. It's Rejoyce. I'm on here,too.

This is very good so far. It really held my interest. I have two remarks. First was the obit "Double murder-suicide. No one's fault." Those 2 statements together are not believable. Also, if Kenny was having that severe an asthma attack, I think someone would help him or even take him to anemergency roo. I have asthma. An inhaler won't work that quickly on a severe attack.

Otherwise, great read!