Whoa, nice run-on sentence! I love the idea of a blue corduroy heart, because it's a really strong visual that I can see and feel (I love corduroy *purrs*). Nice language throughout this, and the form really makes the flow work better, if that makes sense. Keep writing! :)

it is words that crescendo and dear, i cant spell anymore

damn italian

Excellent, excellent work...'Your blue corduroy heart', that's superb imagery right there. This poem has a lovely smooth feel to it. The brilliantly placed breaks give it an uneven, unique rhythm. Marvelous poem from beginning to end.

the format of this, the words, the vividness, the colour: amazing!

this poem is just so incredibley well done. god, i just love it!

keep writing.

- violet.

What is with these line breaks? The phrasing you use is beautiful, with "angel catastrophe" and "circular expression" swimming around, but I was incredibly turned off by the staccato feel. bella

Very smooth, great language. Abstract yet clearly specific. Takes you to another place, if you let it.