|Reviews for Washington Disease|
| hey maria 7/24/06 . chapter 1
I like this a lot; reads like a diary entry for the most part.
"Dred-locks like wet whips at noon/Crust into dandruff by evening." My favorite lines; it's descriptive without being too wordy, and also a little gross.
"That have few worthwhile things," - I think it's a weak line and it'd sound better if it was worded differently.
"So much sweat that,/When I sit down/I feel wet denim." Same with this.
"Dust and dirt—/Disease." The alliteration in this sounds great.
The last three lines are an excellent ending. It's simple, of course, which keeps up the whole tone of this poem, and it also reflects just how much you dislike Washington.