I really loved this! It was very well written. I do belive I agree with Kirstie though. The last line can't should probably be changed to can not. I think it sounds better but it is up to you. Either one works. This was very good though! I myself love witches and witchcraft so that was a bonus. Hoping to see more great written things like this soon!

Mr.Magic

Ah, Mike. I missed your wonderfulness.

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There's one thing that really sticks out to me. In the last line, I can't help but think that "can not" would fit better than "can't." Reading it over again with can not in place of the can't, it sounds better to me. But both work well enough.

Good job, hun. You totally had me looking forward to this when you told me about it, and I'm happy to have finally read it.