Amazing! Saying that sounds stupid and clicheic but I do love this.

Wonderful ending.

(But who IS Occam? And what about his/her razor?)

Keep it up,
-PQ

Awesome. I'm so lazy tonight that most poetry I'm reading I stop half-way through it and look for something better. This, however, I read all the way through.

I love the idea, though some of the rhyming seems kind of forced. Maybe it's just me, though. (And I really shouldn't be talking, my rhyming is horrible.) So, great job!

Again, wow. Okay, I officially love not only you but slam poetry.

-adds to favorites-

Who's Occam?

I really like this... god, do I have to say that for every piece you write? Apparently I do.

Okay, I'll just repeat myself: wordplay, rhyme, beat, repetition = fantastic. Slam is SO your thing. It's so mock-apologetic, undercurrent of very dangerous. I like the bit where you say "take the time to think / about the way you think / so what do you think about that?" because it's confusing. The beginning is really good that way too ("stand up, stand over..."). And "putting you in past tense." I love how everything just leaps from one thing to the next. It's saltitory poetry! Whe!