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| Youkai Author 2006-10-18 ch 1,  | abuseWonderful! Your writing skills have greatly improved! It's fantastic. Great imagery, especially in the first stanza. The wording in the last one's a little hard to understand- perhaps you should rephrase it? |
| Staphen 2006-10-02 ch 1, anon. | abuseThis one's better. The title definitely helped me understand it. Though it might help if you used regular sentence structure more often. "All for to end" doesn't really make sense to me. |
| mizu no kokoro 2006-07-27 ch 1, | abusewow, i can relate to this completely. the confusion of emotions, are they really real? good poem keep writing! |
| Sagia 2006-07-26 ch 1, | abuseYou have a way with keeping your language simple but making the poem very expressive. Not everyone can do that! Really cool! You get your message across very well. |