For some odd reason, instead of catching up on all my fanfiction throughout the week, I felt the need to hop on over to this site and spend the last hour or so rereading this story so that I can leave you a good review(or a half decent one, at least).

Well, obviously, your writing is nearly as great then as it is now. But then again, this story is nearing 3 years old age(close to 2 years since your last update). I've noticed that the last chapter didn't have as many grammatical errors as the first few. But, the writing is still very good and more of the errors and misspellings were minor things. You've earned your stripes since this story and learned the do's and don'ts.

Anyway, I love the entire idea of the story(which, I think, didn't even get the chance to spread its wings before it got ignored). Especially with how you symbolized relationships with washing laundry. The very first paragraph let us know a lot about the protagonist and how she doesn't really put forth any effort in her laundry(which later shows in her "relationship" with Jackson).

Estrella is a very well-written character. Kind of savvy and tomboy-ish but with a lot of girly attributes(like being easily embarrassed and unknowingly using her klutziness as an appeal). I can't help but thing you borrowed yourself in some ways to make her. I think that's a good thing that you based some of your personality on her because it makes her POV a lot more presentable. I could practically hear her every time she speaks.

Her relationship with the two exes, Aaron and Kyle, are very well written. I love the relationship she has with Aaron and how she loves the guy to death and feels the need to compare every relationship to the one she has with him. It kills me, though, I'm banging my head against the walls trying to figure out why Aaron and Estrella broke up. They seem to have an extremely healthy friendship that inevitable turns into a great relationship. In contrast, there's Kyle, whom she can't stand. I love how you've written Kyle so far. He has a bunch of douche-baggy and controlling ways but there's also that passion he feels for Estrella. He wants to be given the chance but she doesn't want to bother and I respect her for not being a sucker.

And Jackson, who seems like a really nice guy, is caught in the middle. Truth be told, I felt like your involvement with Jackson was the only thing that didn't get left hanging in the balance. Aaron seems to be the guy he feels threatened by, while Kyle is just competition(or dirty laundry, if you will).

In regards to the characters, dynamics, and relationships, you get an A+. The story, as a whole, just feels so incomplete(which is a given, seeing as that is the status of this story) but you did a great job of evaluating it thus far. I gotta say, though, the sudden switch from 1st person to 3rd person in chapter 5 felt odd. Knowing how well your writing is now, I'm sure you could have found a more convenient way or switching the POV like that.

But yeah, this review was totally useless. I'm telling you things you're probably already aware of. I just wanted to get a couple of words out and now I ended up with a really big review. I hope this review inspires you to continue this story or rewrite it from scratch.

-Peace out!

loved this chapter.
love estrella's character so much.
love aaron.
hate kyle.
love jackson.
love your writing style.
am tried.
update soon.

hey! it's me again.
i loved this chapter. this aaron guy sounds like my ex-turned-best-friend. i love situations like that.
why did she run away? is she really that scared of going too fast? that's an interesting character development.
i really like this story. please continue

I think you've got an awesome idea here. I really enjoy this story. Update soon, please.

OMG!
This is SO cute.
Please update soon!

I loved how she seemed so shy. Very cute. I can't wait to see what will happen when they start to talk! This story is really good. Good luck with the writers block. I hope we get to see another chapter of the orignal fic where the friends are picking up one of them's brother. I can't think of the name of it right now but I would love to see more of it!!

~felicia

I really like this it's good. I also approve of what Estrella is studying. Journalism YAY!!Well anyway...I hope you update soon

This is really, really good. I like it.

This is very good. You should keep it going. Sorry I have no crit for you. I think it's very interesting, a great story line.

~felicia

Your fic is very nice. [[: The only thing I don't like about it is the lack of detail. It may just be me and my obsession with details, but other than that, I look forward to the next chapter.

-Psyten