A moving rendition of an interesting idea... Loved your work on the language, and thought that the character development was fairly realistic.
Nice.
Erisah

Oh...

Very nice! Except for one or two grammatical erros, this was great. Lots of action and blood, and you've given it a good chance to become very in-depth story. Onward!

Oops! Forgot about Outcast! ^-^ I'm going to read it now!

Amazing! Astounding! And absolutely wonderful! Is there a sequel? I shall find out!

You make the words come alive. There's no other way to describe it! It's like you've breathed life into them.

Nice details on the killing scene! I'm just glad I'm not squeamish otherwise... *smiles* I really like it! A 'demon' and valei-woman! ^-^

Hey Casey Drake,

This story was awesome! I love your story, Heart of a Dragon, it has a very interesting storyplot. So the story ended? Aww..how I love to read more though. Anyway, very nice ending. Your writing style is very great. Keep up the good work. Hope there will be more simliar story like this. I love any ancient stories. Please, please would you continue to write a triology after this story? Please? Thanks A Lot!

Best,

KaronePrincess

I'm VERY sorry for not reviewing the last 8 chapters! *blushes* I procrastinated for far too long. . . .

Anyways, I love how Ilsa and Kendal's love progressed up until the end, especially how Ilsa reacted to seeing Kendal kill the unworthy-of-being-named jerks that. . .I think you know who I'm talking about.

Mark: . . .You are pathetic.

Me: Shut up! I thought you were on strike!

Mark: . . .It took you this long to realize that that was impossible?! I don't have any other jobs!

Me: -_- Terrific. Just when things were getting good. . .Anyways, I'm afraid I don't have time to talk about all my favorite parts, but I want to point out two more things: the part with the dancing was just plain AWESOME, and I like how even with the bitter-sweet ending, Ilsa still has the hope of seeing Kendal again. :)

Anyways, I've got to go. :( Great story! Please update Outcast soon! :P ;)

~Elicael, Fire Sarien~

this story was awesome!
i dont think i read a story where two people like each other bu they speak two different languages.
it was well written and i liked the descriptions/translations of the language you made at the end.
maybe i missed this, but did you make up the language? the info about the verbs, etc., seemed quite detailed to me.

So why don't we see anything of Goody Sarra in Outcast? I think you should have included his return to his people.

I should have started this after Outcast, methinks, because now I have all sort of happy suppositions where that story is going.

Nice epilogue, dividing it between the two of them, their hopes and sorrows.

Great work--it was a fun read from start to finish!

Love the touch with the old lady that for once (as opposed to the cliche) isn't a gossip.

Quite an abrupt separation there--that part seemed a little rushed, but apparently she fully expected to follow him soon?

Best read the last bit and find out... =)

Another great chapter, bringing in bits of religion and culture. I quite like how what is habitual ritual to one is strange to the other.

By 'voicing' do you mean whistling and making noise in the throat at the same time? That WOULD be very, very hard to do a song to!

Just LOVE the thought and depth you put into the world behind this story, with the type of poison, and the use of 'friend.' That's a thing I wish had more words in English.

Nice to have a bit of humor and mockery after the tension of the last few chapters (well, most of them)--nice change of the pace, though I fear it won't last.

Great work!

Sorry I'm slow--been in California visiting my parents for the holidays, and with the FictionPress e-mails not working, didn't even know about these new chapters. Certainly wasn't for lack of interest after that cliffhanger! =)

Anyway, great reaction from Eelsa--felt very real. I quite enjoy Kendal's accent and their attempts at communication. Sad realization for Ilsa at the end, though I'd think she'd realize how impossible it would be to hide him indefinitely.

One question:
"especially with the kast keeping his leg straight only in mandragora form"
I'm not sure if 'kast' is just a typo, or your portrayal of Kendal's usage of the word...maybe italics, to make that clear?

Great work--off for more!