I like the story, it's cool. My main character for vampire storys is a girl named Elizabeth, weird.

Oh! I like that one...it is creepy :D

What was his name?

He will be avenged :P like the other bones :P

What does she do with the bodies? (me and my morbid fasination :D )

Obviously she drinks/serves the blood...does she bathe in it? it's meant to be good for your body...Not that I know :D Does she eat the flesh? :o

awesome plotline. i loved the end.

One word... creapy.

I have allways hated horror, I get so creaped, but this is so cool.

What's she going to do, kill him or somthing?

I know a chick named Elizabeth in the other class, now I don't wanna go near her. Thanks alot... (sarcasm ;D )

Anyway, cool story, please continue.

Wow, scary... I liked it a lot!

Great one-shot! It kept me reading and reading, especially because I knew something was wrong but I couldn't tell what. And the bit of detail with the stones that were actually bones was perfect. It didn't scream "I'm important!" immediately, but was a memorable line that made it seem plausible that the main character might remember it. Great job!

frekyy. lolz nah it was good. freeky but still good.. most just freeky

This was Great! Monsters do come in all shapes and sizes.

Wow. From the beginning, to the series of revelations leading to the end, this is really, really good.

I liked "the red wine" part best. And his arrogant "I'm a big strong man" remark. Towards the end, after we realized his fate, the readers see exactly how ironic that statement is.

::content smile:: I love irony. Thank you for including some in your story.

Why would she keep bones in her yard? What if someone recognized them for what they were?

. . .

I suppose, in Elizabeth's words. "It won't really make a difference."

xchoco

OMG! The suspense! Ew, that woman is a sicko! Good one shot though!

Oh, sweet. I absolutely loved it. It was a really good one-shot. :)

"To life, to death, and to never going hungry" For some reason it reminds of vampires? Elizabeth was a vampire wasn't she? The whole small sharp teeth, bloody "wine", and the bones? Either she's a vampire or a psychopathic-serial-killer, lol.

I liked it, and I wonder if Elizabeth ever killed the guy... I like how you left us hanging; it fits well with this one-shot.

-Keep Writing :)

:x: Silent-Rebel

whoah. creepy much? But, at the beginning, I thought the narrator was a girl. Why, I don't know. I guiess, to me, it just seemed like...how girls talk. but anyway, this was a really good one shot. I like it.