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Reviews For: Yellow Heart

ddz008 2008-03-15 ch 2,	abuseYou must update!! Please! It was just beginning! :D
Vidal 2008-01-13 ch 2, anon.	abuseI rather like the idea, but I think the story is lacking a bit of substance, almost as if these written words were hollow shells. Well, I guess that makes sense consideringthe context, but still, I want to see some substance to our dearest friend Jeremy! In an case, great job as usual, and update soon! I'll be watching ;)
Wittyilynamed 2008-01-05 ch 2,	abuseGapes I love this! But you haven't updated in 2 YEARS. Do you realise the tragedy this is? This could be SUCH a promising story. Oh sure, you grow bored, have other idea's. But this ones so unique, you can't just stop! Anyway Sincerely, Wit.
Kimi504 2006-12-29 ch 2,	abuseIt's good! I've always liked Greek mythology and I like how you put it in modern times!
Jayn 2006-08-16 ch 2,	abuseI'm really enjoying this story. The whole God reincarnation thing is really cool. I hope you update soon!
SerialXLain 2006-08-15 ch 2,	abuseYou can skip over this first paragraph. I just needed to get it out. hahahaha. -.- You. Or me. I'm guessing me. I need someone to yell at XD Or just talk at... O.o So if you remember, in my last review I said I was writing a story that sounded vaguely similar to this...? I have some dude looking for his lover who went away to look for his previous lover. Well the guy who went away is named Dionysus. Dio for short. And I see Dionysus in this and it was just weird...but it makes sense since this has to do with mythology and I just liked the name Dio... Okay sorry... Safe to read now: Okay so Daniel/Dionysus kind of drove me crazy...his attitude made me want to slap him in the face. Aww Jeremy's so sweet... And I love the scene when Jeremy's telling Lucas that he loves him...that was really...pretty. :) xoxo
xarryx 2006-08-15 ch 2,	abusehehe... Pwease add another chapter... im loving it at the moment and wonna read more!! Well done and keep up the hard work, you truely are great! Def gonna be added to one of my fav stories
Sakru angelqueen 2006-08-15 ch 2,	abuseTe chapter reminded me of a filler chapter, but the story point works and the characters are nicley drawn out!
Ally Lei 2006-08-15 ch 2,	abuseOh, this is a grreat story! I really like the main character and his quest for his love. i hope he finds it. Update soon please!
SerialXLain 2006-08-09 ch 1,	abuseYay I'm glad I finally read this. At first I was a little apprehensive because I have an idea that vaguely resembled this one for a story...I say vaguely now because reading it...it's a lot different. But yeah. "where they would make strawberry pancakes anyways and pretend it was still breakfast." I loved that. I just thought it was so sweet. Awesome idea for this. Can't wait to read more. You're going on my favorite author list. ^_^ Love xox
Rain Angel 2006-07-26 ch 1,	abuseThis story is like a cool glass of sparkling sweet lemonade on a hot humid summer's day. I really like your writing style and the easily likable characters. The plot is also very unique. It's hard to find slash stories that aren't repeating the same storyline over and over again. It is undeniable. Your talent is remarkable. I patiently await the next chapter, which I'm sure will also be as wonderful as the first. Truly an amazing start to what I know will definitely become an amazing story.
Sakru angelqueen 2006-07-26 ch 1,	abuseI'm liking this story. I like how you threw me right into the story getting it rolling pretty quickly.
Faithful Jewel 2006-07-26 ch 1,	abuseA few things drew me to this story: I love mythology, especially the Greek gods - I also like to read different genres I'd never have even taken a glance at before! Romance (and slash) isn't exactly my strongpoint, but I do feel inclined to make some rambling comments on this. The fact it is in the present tense makes it different from the more common past, which really gives it a breath of fresh air. I have seen quite a few mythological works, but I don't think I have ever seen one with such a unique storyline as this. The way it is split up works perfectly, especially in showing the change of Jeremy from happiness, to sadness, to hope and reform. I like his character as it makes him seem "human" which quite a lot of stories nowadays lack. In truth, slash doesn't bother me in the slightest as long as it's not mentioned in every other sentence (most common in fan-fictions) and the way that it affects this story means it is relevant but not overbearing. Yet again, it gives the whole piece a much more fresh air as not many people attempt it in such a way. What else can I say? I love it! I didn't spot any massive mistakes, or any small mistakes either, so I congratulate you on your skill at that. It kept me involved and interested all the way through - sometimes stories really bore you after a few paragraphs. The amount of dialogue is good - not too much to make it more script like but not too little to uninvolve the reader. Sometimes some of the pieces after the dialogue could be removed (We can usually deduce who is talking at the time, but it's no massive problem - everyone has their different styles!) Overall I think this is an excellent piece. It will go on my favourites and I will await a new chapter with great anticipation - keep on writing, you have real talent.

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