I really like the content in this. It's beautifully written. However the format seems to get slightly annoying after a few lines. There may be a reason for that, but it can also be limiting to your reader. Just my opinion.

But you're still very talented and I loved reading this!

I would love opinions from a talented writer like yourself on my work! It would mean a lot.

the formatting got a little crazy on this one.. had to concentrate to read it (which actually made me apprecate the poem more as i wasn't semi-skimming) but still..

overall, i still lurved it and am adding to favs :)

Wow, there's a lot of formatting in this. I love the last stanza, with the image of stars and hearts bursting. It's pretty. Reminds me of fireworks. "as if i were plastic & botox" - M, I love that line. Gorgeous work. Keep writing! :)

wonderfully original. and beautiful. i adored the creativity of the format, it added so much to the confusion and the thoughts of the person in the poem. the poem itself is lovel, so heartfelt, with an ending i'm jealous of. love it.

eyelids flicking upward (..heaven..is..not..there..) & wespiral down

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flawless.

oh wow... this is so amazing! I love the format so much. Its beautiful even without the reading the poem. I especcially love the line - 'eyelids flicking upward (..heaven..is..not..there..)'but I love the whole thing. This is really different and pretty and love! yay!

i cant really read it wellbut this is like eye candy for a writer. really, it dazzles

the format is enough to make you overdose on beauty, and the words just send you straight to the hospital.

i like the format... but then again i don't. maybe it's a bit over done (?) - i don't know.

"if i smile(sohardforyou)/will you give back my(/your) h e a r t"

love those lines though.

this is just ... absolutely amazing. the format is done extremely well, it adds even more power and beauty to an already incredible poem. you used it perfectly ... i absolutely love this.

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"if i smile(sohardforyou)will you give back my(/your) h e a r t" - ** God damn, I can relate to that and oh so bitterly feel that line roll from my tongue each and everytime I think of the exact same thing; you write heartbreak like you do your poetry, beautifully.

~* Noelle