I thought it was a very well written piece. Also, it got to me in a way well written stories should. I had an experience when I was younger (similar to Sapphire's) and it almost made me cry. That's the way good writing is supposed to be. This story is better than a lot of other vampire stories I've on read on here. Probably one of the best.

Bravo. This was a very well done short story, especially for someone not familiar with writing a story with vampires. It is uncommon nowadays for writers to use traditional mythology and you incorporated it beautifully. It I give any negative comment, though, it would be that I would have liked to have seen more of the characters' personalities, a fairly common problem for short stories. This problem is severely lacking in most short stories due to the difficulty in fitting it in with so little room, so it's only to be expected. Keep up the writing.

it was good :D

i liked that very much. it was a great story, and it was perfect to be short. for some reason, i feel that if it was drawn out into many chapters, it wouldnt have been as good. Thanks for writnig this, i'm going to look at your other work too.

Simply adorable. It's very well organized and romantic. Good job!

That was a lovely story that you wrote looking foward to reading more like that if you will write at least.

That was really pretty and a lovely ending, everything was kept smooth and explained and I think it was right for her to not take Camerons apology.

JM

this was awesome i luv vampire fics!

I like this story a lot! Please update soon! Interesting plot and characters. Rafael... oh yeah!

Hi, Kanna-sama, it's me. Didn't have time to fully finish the chap, but here's what i have to say so far.

I like it, but if there's anything i can comment, i thought things moved a little fast and I spotted some errors, but they're nothing a couple of typos a read-through will fix.

I really like the concept, so keep it up . Oh, btw Rafael Stone - what a great name!

i like the story.. just hoping it can happen in real life.. the vampire will probably go crazy because she'll eventually get old and die... so why not like turn her into one? right? and iono.. i just like it... it's really good... hehe.. cute and romantic too.. so yeah

It was kind of sweet. There is a book you might be interested in, "The Reluctant Miss Van Helsing". It deals with much the same thing as your story.-K

I really, really like this. It's different from most other stories.

GREAT JOB! now onto chapter 2!

This is a good story, and very interesting. I'll be reading on when you update.