Im excited to see where this story is going! Hurry and write more!

i quite like this first chapter, its quite good considering you introduced the cast and their various motives. though i hope you'd elaborate more on relina's childhood.. it doesnt sound like what a royal should go through or something.. duval seems like helping relina; hope its not for his own gain. :) anyway continue writing, and i'd be looking forward to more! (: you're on author alerts!

I thought it was well-written. I like how you portray court life, as it seems very realistic to me. However, I do believe that you main character is slightly stereotypical. Maybe it would be beneficial to give her some obvious flaws. Just something to think about.

Overall, excellent.

The Artful Dodger