Beautifully dizzying. Marvelous work, I always love your imagery. Sometimes, I think maybe you can see inside my head, but perhaps every now and then everyone feels the same. All that aside, bravo.

this is amazingly painful but gorgeously written. i love the last three stanza's. especially "when the moon was in shine". this is great writing.

xoxo

The repetition is very effective. I love the feeling I get from thinking;

"We were never meant to last" Like you have tried to defy your destiny, but it engulfed you anyways. Inspiring, I think! _

Great writing, keep it up! _

this was a very nicely done poem. i loved loved loved the last stanza, it was beautiful. great job!

"And the graying pictures on the wall/ that you had painted only served/ as a memory, something to remind me/ like the palaces that had gone down,/ we were never meant to last."