Aw. I know what you're getting at here, it hits me hard. This is very powerful and poignant. Hmm. Some constructive criticism: I think the beginning was far more gripping than the end. I do like the last line a lot, but IMO the two lines before it seem a bit out-of-the-flow, i suppose you could say. But really, this is very good. You make a point that I think everyone in our age group should take heart-and maybe those who aren't too. Keep this up, please.

This poem rings so true.

I miss the innocence of being younger. And I'm sure there are plenty of things that I have yet to learn.

I think the simple terms you used really got the point across. Good job. :-)