I quite like your work, but this one is by far my favorite I imagine.
There are a few things that are a few mistakes that I'd like to point out though.

"crocked"
Was that an intentional word or did it mean to be 'crooked'? Because the latter seems to make more sense to me.

"And that’s when broke him."
I figure a 'she' should be in there somewhere.

"they way the fit so ** flawlessly"
I believe that's already been pointed out right?
If not, then they need to be swapped.

But those are small things, not incredibly important, but they do reflect back on you.
You don't need to change it (I never do. Too much work. xD), but you should acknowledge that you noticed it. Which I'm sure you have.

All in all, a great piece.

I liked this! very haunting and very beautiful.

Nice, very tender and very good characetrs, i especially loved 'the way they fit so ** flawlessly' (you typed the and they in the wrong order though, just mentioning it in case you wanna edit) a lot of potential for a full story here, the characetrs are quite strong, enjoyed it a lot.

Peace out, kenzie